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collector1
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"A Sad Day" in senryu and linked tanka unknown day smoke shroud
a bullet to his head killed
hero of some war fought
the same all history's years
presidents attack men die
winners equal lost
in time we all lose in war
senseless waste of life
old vet looking back sadly
youth robbing youth of life's joy
uniform all's left
reminding only the few
death's futility
the wounded also
great heroes marked today
life's pain remembrance
grave ashes just dead
cold stone marks their lives now gone
hopeless death still death
yet we salute sacrifice
celebrating veterans
you our war heroes always
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Author's Comments: | | forgive me. this is a very bad day for me each year. the older I get the worse it becomes. remember back with me the wars of the past. our enemies are our friends now. what has anyone gained. will we ever learn and become the human beings God intended us to be or will we always be just His most intelligent animal. technically, what your are reading is a group of linked senryu with the first two poems being tanka and then 4 linked senryu. cole, of the forgotten war. |
From the author's book: | | Chapter: Patriotism | | Poem first accepted for publication on Nov 10 2006 |
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grave ashes just dead
cold stone marks their lives now gone
hopeless death still death
What a stark eye opener this is. Your write is very good, ... |  |
Reviewed by Gungalo
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Cole, I an very truned off by this government and war, my grandfather became a citizen from Portugal when he joined WWI, 5 uncles, one grandtather, fa ... | |
Reviewed by KarenJeanMarie
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This poem really effected me deeply Cole. I haven't been to war but I hold to the same sentiments as you. What a terribly waste of life, when our so c ... | |
Reviewed by Vivienne Lorraine Harding
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Our world is marked in history by the wars.. fought.. won.. and lost.. In the the making is the shaping of those exposed.. in all ways.. Shall we lear ... | |
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So sad this brings horrid memories. But these memories you have described well and have shared with those that have forgotten and for those that are t ... | |
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very beautiful very sad very true all of the above i enjoyed reading the comments after your piece it is so close to my heart they way you described i ... | |
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Oh cole no matter the war there is a cost and it is terrible that anyone would name a war that took so many lives "a forgotten war" yet I know that is ... | |
Reviewed by Dark Moon
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A most compelling and deeply though provoking offering this one cole, of the forgotten war well remembered. A day this one of remembering and of shari ... | |
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A truly wonderfully penned tribute to our country's finest Cole dear, as I do also salute you and many as well for your given tasks and duty to our gr ... | |
Reviewed by enchantedpoetess
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Your poem gripped me and touched me deeply, but more so, was the last line of your author's comment --
"Cole, of the forgotten war...."
And I do ... | |
Reviewed by Aegirs Datter
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I am very much impressed with the way you bring this forward. I have lost a nephew to terrorists, but still the logic of war declared by greedy leader ... | |
Reviewed by Joebirdies
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Dear Cole, it is a hard day for so many, those just now burying their loved ones, those of us with loved ones in the armed services who worry and pray ... | |
Reviewed by s7716
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Vetrans day always a sad day. This is very heartfelt writing. I know it is syllable counted, but it reads like it needs more words. The essence of wha ... | |
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I like this poem. It is more "matter-of-fact" without the flowery linkage between each stanza. It works, as the topic is one of stark sadness. Welldon ... | |
Reviewed by Cherie Lynn
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This is a sad day for all-the remembrance each have of their lost and wounded friends and family.
This day always brings tears to my eyes.
My husb ... | |
Reviewed by Aki
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Cole, Am I going to be the first to review your wonderful poem..I want to say , my Dad was in the 1st world war. He got frozen feet and had to have so ... | |
Reviewed by Mattelois
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