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Poem

The Puppy Dog Crawl

Fire Fighters

The Puppy Dog Crawl

The wind gusts furiously
forming white horses in the clouds.
There is a strong smell of smoke in the air
as engine and tanker pull up on the scene.
Black smoke is roaring upward as flames
shoot out the windows.
A woman screams, my child, pointing upstairs.
My feet hit the ground running,
without thinking I’m inside in seconds.
The room is ablaze, filled with a gray-black haze.
I stumble and fall over the coffee table,
a swear word sneaks out.
I feel along the wall to the stairs.
I crawl upward unable to see.
The heat is intense.
I find the bathroom, pull down towels
and wet them in the bathtub.
I crawl down the hall, finding a giraffe, I feel the door.
I open it, crawl inside and place a
rug against the bottom.
There is whimpering from the closet.
Opening the door, a small child crawls out.
I whisper we are going to play a game
called the puppy dog crawl.
He smiles as I place the wet
towel in his mouth,
then the other end in mine.
Smoke billows all around us.
My partner is waiting with a ladder
at the window.
He reaches for us as the child hugs
my neck with the towel
still in his mouth, we climb out and he is in
his mother’s arms in a flash.
He is telling her that we did the puppy dog crawl.
She smiles at me and mouths, the puppy dog crawl?
Thank you.
Copyright 2005 Susan Elaine Graves

By Justastar2

Author's Comments:
To the Fire Fighters that face danger every day. Imagination helps. I'm an X Fire Fighter and I often write about true experiences by myself and others

From the author's book:
Chapter: Patriotism
Poem first accepted for publication on Nov 14 2006

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Susan, I was so touched by your poem. I consider all firefighters angels in disguise. In my area, our firefighters just recently changed from volun ...

Reviewed by poetic chaos

This is not only a great work written from an experience, it is likewise a VERY informative way to tell others what to do in a house full of smoke. Y ...

Reviewed by Sir Poet

There are so many out there that put their lives in harms way each day. I like the way you have shared this and give credit to all...Teri ...

Reviewed by TCart

This is a beautiful account of doing as the Savior has advocated. Being of service to others and particularly children. Being of service is great but ...

Reviewed by raymondo77

I enjoyed reading this and appreciate that you can detail real events that we as citizens would never hear if it werent for your telling of them. I im ...

Reviewed by Tspoon

I have such respect for what you do! This one tells a stunning tale and a brilliant tactic to keep the little one from panicing! Well done. :-)) ...

Reviewed by rswenger

Simply outstanding my poet friend...And what a glorious tribute to the brave Firefighters that risk their lives so that others may live...You describe ...

Reviewed by ShyThunder

SUSAN ELAINE, WHAT A GREAT STORY THIS WAS..IT WAS DESCRIPTIVE AND CREATIVE IN ITS WORDING..A PICTURE ON CANVAS RIGHT TO THE POINT..I LOVE THE LAST LIN ...

Reviewed by Mattelois

This prose piece is so vividly written I could almost smell the smoke and feel the heat. You held me captive until the child was safe, as well as the ...

Reviewed by

This was exciting. Thank you for sharing an experience most of us will never feel. I was so glad it had a happy ending. Your imaging is great. Dick ...

Reviewed by Dickson

A MOST EXCITING WRITE AND SOUNDS OF TRUE HEROISM INVOLVED IN THIS STORY POEM IT WAS EXCITING ALL THE WAY FROM START TO FINISH AND WE TEND TO INVENT TH ...

Reviewed by CDEEDS

Very very good.. Dramatic and vivid pictures painted in words, words that tend to sentiment and love. A great write and a pleasure to read~~florin ...

Reviewed by florin

EXCELLENT JOB THIS ONE HITS CLOSE TO HOME MY DAD IS A FIREMAN AND I HAVE AN UNCLE THAT IS TOO, VERY WELL WRITTEN WITH TERRIFIC IMAGERY, YOURFRIEND ,CH ...

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Hi Justastar2, Narrative prose poem about a rescue of a young child in a burning house by a brave firefighter, the author. They play a game ...

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Susan, that is a very vividly written story poem. Happily, the two of you survived. Hemmingway never believed that a writer could honestly write, un ...

Reviewed by Lylebyoir

Very impactful poem, it gave me chills with its graphic imagery. It was like watching the movies Ladder 54 and Backdraft. The ending lines were the ex ...

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What a beautiful enotional poem you have here. I held my breath to the end-afraid to reach the bottom. You paid a lovely tribute to firefighrters. ...

Reviewed by Aki
 
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