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Chrissianne
Chrissianne
Me on my 'Mary Kay' day in 2007...the
beautician said she used £100 worth
of products on me! Nowadays I just put
on the paper bag the products came i... More

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Poem

A Valentine Tale..Pat's Heartbeat Challenge

To anxious women everywhere....

My heartbeats, like a jungle drum, increase in pace as the moment I have longed for draws ever closer. My lover is coming to stay for Valentine's Day and I am cooking an exotic dinner to be followed by a special desert...me with whipped cream maybe....

Excitement builds and the hall mirror complains bitterly that I have already looked at my carefully made up reflection far too many times already...

Cushions are plumped and the dinner checked yet again as I wander about making sure everything is just so.

Very soon, very soon, it won't be long now. Must check my lipstick again! The mirror groans...

Now my heart is pounding, threatening to deafen me, as suddenly the cats prick their ears - they hear a familiar car drawing up outside...the click of the door, my heart thumping so loudly now, and there in the doorway -

Mum!

I didn't expect you! Yes, the place does look very tidy. Can't stop? Just saying hello? Oh dear, never mind..it was lovely of you to drop in...

Sigh....

Now my heartbeat has calmed and Mum is on her way home. I notice the rain has stopped at last and think of the poor garden birds. So, with oversized mens slippers on my feet (I so love to wear them!) and jacket over my shoulders, I take a bowl of food outside.

My giant footwear does not help at all as I slip on some wet mud! I fall awkwardly, scattering birdseed and my jacket and also breaking polished fingernails as I land on the muddy ground with a thud. Then, as if waiting for this very moment, the Heavens open....I sit and cry.

My hands, clothes, feet are all covered in mud, my dripping hair is plastered to my wet face and my make-up is no doubt running down my cheeks as I forlornly trudge back to the house. I open the door and to my horror, there he stands! There stands the gorgeous man I have fretted for all day; the man I made myself irresistible for; the man I so wanted to please....

His expression, at first concerned, turns to laughter at the sorry sight of me. I want to cry bitterly but a grin seizes my mouth and I am compelled to join in with his laughter.

Oh, but then, then my heartbeat threatens to drown out the sound of laughter as he takes me, wet and muddy, into his arms.

As his hungry kisses smother my face, smudging further my ruined make-up, he takes a breath to tell me that I have never looked so adorable nor so lovely!

And the mirror can't help but to laugh with us.


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By Chrissianne

Author's Comments:
A could be true story for Pat's great Heartbeat challenge - hope you enjoyed the read!

From the author's book: A nice cup of tea and a bit of me....
Chapter: Special Occasions
Poem first accepted for publication on Feb 03 2010

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Reviews and Diamond Ratings for this poem

What a very funny tale you came up with here Chrissie!  I  could well imagine the sorry look on your face as you stood there bemoa ...

Reviewed by John Henry

A sense of humor can save almost any situation. An object lesson about never taking ourselves too seriously. I know a few people who have the problem ...

Reviewed by callednow

This is something that probably happens all too often. LOL I know I can think of several scenarios where something similar has happened to me. LOL You ...

Reviewed by Scarlettdreams.

OH, CHRISSI, I FELT THE EXCITEMENT BUILDING, THEN I LAUGHED, THEN I WANTED TO CRY, AND FINALLY I EXHALED AND LAUGHED WITH RELIEF AT THE GREAT CLOSING! ...

Reviewed by Char

Wonderful story telling in your VD piece Chrissi! Nice work drawing the reader into the tension and excitement of the preparations, the quasi-tragic, ...

Reviewed by ChristopherSea

Thanks for the great laugh this morning and the warming of my heart just looking at you. Your imaging so vivid I could just see everything. A very del ...

Reviewed by Dickson

Oh my!  What a story!  This is just precious...funny, romantic, and completely relate-able.   While we all don't dream of somethin ...

Reviewed by Juvie on Feb 05 2010


A darling tale, dear poetess friend! This has such charm and holds a redaer's interest through anf through. The description, the building of emotion a ...

Reviewed by #1Sue on Feb 05 2010


BRAVO!! Chrissi, you have really outdone yourself with this wonderful story. Sounds like something that would really happen especially to someone as c ...

Reviewed by Janmp

And I rest my case... this was great, it had every emotion a person could possibly feel when waiting for that special person... although I think if we ...

Reviewed by Lonelyriver

This is beautiful, Chrissi.. I'm so sorry I made your bells ring when I turned up but what followed proved a point. It doesn't matter what you look li ...

Reviewed by Mollie

A brilliant reply from the challenge Chrissie and the imagery reminded me from the film , was it calamity jane when she got herself all beautiful for ...

Reviewed by Dee

Ohhhhh, you have me rolling on the floor, Holy crap, this is off the wall good.....the imagery here makes for  side splitting pain of laughter... ...

Reviewed by joeysgirl1

Reminds me of some words from a popular song goes somewhat like this....... Kay  serah serah whatever will be will be the futures not ours to se ...

Reviewed by bond007
 
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